Factors related to a child’s home environment and parenting, education and availability of learning resources, and nutrition, among others, all contribute to intelligence.
I have given you 6.5 for LR For grammar, I have made corrections above.
The number of errors means that 6 is the most I can give for GRA. My essay correction lets you know your current level, and what you need to do to move your scores higher.
Likewise, many superstars such as Amitabhbachan, worked flat out in order to gain prosperity, regardless of their acting SOCIAL background.
Thus it is DEMONSTRATED THAT IN THE EFFORTjustified with the above illustration in an effort to reach at the peak position in a career, external facotrs plays PLAY a pivotal role.
To conclude, although views of people vary regarding the attaining of intelligence, I opine that it depends upon the personal efforts of an individual but not on genes. You have stated you position in the introduction, which is not suitable for a “discuss both sides” format.
More importantly, you then contradicted your own view in the first BP – “Therefore, clearly represents that intellectual ability of an individual is determined by his genetics.” When you discuss the other side you must make clear that this is not your view.
I return your essays with feedback and scores within 48 hours. In my view, I consider that a person achieve MAY ACHIEVE perfection through learning only.
On the one hand, some people assume that talent is genetically inherited by an individual from his parents.
This can be illustratdd ILLUSTRATED by a two year old singer TWO-YEAR-OLD SINGER Ali who had been WAS awarded THE BEST SINGERas the best singer in a reality show.
In an interview he told REPORTERS that he never took any training but has HAD inherited this voice from his father who is a musician.